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1. Do you like buying shoes? How often?
I can¡¯t buy as often as I like. My budget is limited. I get new one that I like only when I need them. These days, I found shoes that I like the design, but I am thinking about buying them because they are not necessary.
2. Have you ever bought shoes online?
Yes. Half of my shoes were bought on the internet. I can buy it cheaper in online store than offline. I sometimes go store just to put on shoes before I buy.
3. How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
It¡¯s about 150 dollars on average. I think the price of my shoes went up because my feet grew bigger than when I was young.
4. Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
I prefer comfortable shoes, I¡¯m glad there are many comfortable and fashionable shoes. Otherwise, I would have bought twice as many shoes.

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Hello there, Alice! 

It's great to see you here once again. Your answers are very wel composed. The words you used are very effective and appropriate to the context of the question. Let us expound on them in class later.

Thank you for sending these four answers to the questions.

Catch you soon!

-T. Donna =)

1. Do you like buying shoes? How often?
I can¡¯t buy as often as I like. My budget is limited. 
>> Correct!

I get new one that I like only when I need them. 
>> I get a new one that I like only when I need them. 

These days, I found shoes that I like the design, but I am thinking about buying them because they are not necessary.
>> These days, I found a shoe design that I like but I am thinking well about buying them because they are not necessary.

2. Have you ever bought shoes online?
Yes. Half of my shoes were bought on the internet. 
>> Correct!

I can buy it cheaper in online store than offline. 
>> I can buy it cheaper on the online store rather than offline. 

I sometimes go store just to put on shoes before I buy.
>> I sometimes go to a store just to put on shoes before I buy it.

3. How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
It¡¯s about 150 dollars on average. I think the price of my shoes went up because my feet grew bigger than when I was young.
>> Correct!

4. Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
I prefer comfortable shoes, I¡¯m glad there are many comfortable and fashionable shoes. 
>> Correct!
Or: I prefer comfortable shoes, I¡¯m glad there are many comfortable and fashionable. 

Otherwise, I would have bought twice as many shoes.
>> Correct!
Or: Otherwise, I would have bought twice the number of my shoes.
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