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What is your definition of success and failure in life?

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In my opinion, there is no definition of success and failure in our lives.
Others may think that our lives are success or failure.
Even we may think that our lives are success or failure.
But, actually, there is no definition of success and failure in our lives.
We are just living our lives, and we already succeed a lot of things in our lives.
Because of these reasons, I think there is no definition of success and failure in our lives.

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Hi John! 

Yes, we are the ones in control in our lives. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon

In my opinion, there is no definition of success and failure in our lives.
>> In my opinion, there is no definition to success and failure in our lives.

Others may think that our lives are success or failure.
>> Others may think that our lives are a success or failure.

Even we may think that our lives are success or failure.
>> Sometimes we may think like so. 

But, actually, there is no definition of success and failure in our lives.
>> But actually, there is no definite definition to success and failure. 

We are just living our lives, and we already succeed a lot of things in our lives.
>> CORRECT

Because of these reasons, I think there is no definition of success and failure in our lives.
>> Because of these reasons, I think there is no definition to success and failure in our lives.

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