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What is the worst dream you\'ve ever had?

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I've ever before that the worst dream is to be chased by someone. I still remember the location where It was a foggy alleyway, but I don't know who's after me. And then, I thought she gave up because she didn't follow me from some point, There was a dead end in front of me, and there was a ladder there, so I climbed up the ladder. But I woke up the moment she grabbed me by my ankle. Amazing?

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Hi Elic! 

That spooked me. Hahahaha! 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon

I've ever before that the worst dream is to be chased by someone. 
>>  I've had a nightmare before wherein I was being chased by someone. 

I still remember the location where It was a foggy alleyway, but I don't know who's after me. 
>> I still remember the location. It was a foggy alleyway, but I don't know who's after me. 

And then, I thought she gave up because she didn't follow me from some point, There was a dead end in front of me, and there was a ladder there, so I climbed up the ladder. 
>> And then, I thought she gave up because she didn't follow me at some point. And then there was a dead end in front of me and there was a ladder there, so I climbed up the ladder. 

But I woke up the moment she grabbed me by my ankle. Amazing?
>> But I woke up the moment she grabbed me by my ankle. Amazing, right?

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