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The reason why modern people are busy is that we have 'light'. In the agricultural area, there was no light. People had to sleep and took a rest at night because anything cannot be seen. However, these days, we do not have to sleep early. Light makes us do many things at night. It means that people living in modern times can work, enjoy their free time, and spend time with their friends or family. For this reason, they had no time to take a rest. I am definitely believe that light extend our activity time leading people to be busy.

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Hello Sophia, you finished your writing task today just like you wanted. Great Job! 
Thank you for following the directions so carefully. ~T. Lyn
The reason why modern people are busy is that we have 'light'.
>>The reason why modern people are busy is because of 'light' and 'brightness'.
In the agricultural area, there was no light.
>>There was no light in the agricultural area.
People had to sleep and took a rest at night because anything cannot be seen.
>>People had to sleep and rest at night because they couldn't see anything.
However, these days, we do not have to sleep early.
>>However, we don't have to go to bed early these days.
Light makes us do many things at night.
>>Correct.
It means that people living in modern times can work, enjoy their free time, and spend time with their friends or family.
>>It means that modern people can work, play and spend time with friends and family.
For this reason, they had no time to take a rest.
>>Correct.
I am definitely believe that light extend our activity time leading people to be busy.
>>I definitely believe that light keeps people busy by prolonging our active hours.
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