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What is your worst experience in life that you can\'t forget? Explain in detail.

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When I was an university student, I had a big fight with my friend. That¡¯s because she felt alone since I made my first boyfriend. Although I tried to spend more time with her, she was kind of a jealous. She gossiped behind my back and I realized it afterward through other friends. I was so angry about her on that time. She didn¡¯t feel sorry to me and I didn¡¯t want to forgive her. We didn¡¯t talk each other anymore after the fight. It was affected my university life a lot. For instance, I had to make other friends because of her. I got through a tough time during my university life. I couldn¡¯t still forget the worst experience. I don¡¯t want to get through one more time in my life. It was the most terrible experience that I've ever had.

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Hi Chloe! 

Oh, that's so unfortunate. I think your friend was very immature during that time. Gossiping is never a good thing.  :( 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

When I was an university student, I had a big fight with my friend. 
>> When I was a university student, I had a big fight with my friend. 

That¡¯s because she felt alone since I made my first boyfriend. 
>> That¡¯s because she felt alone since I had my first boyfriend. 

Although I tried to spend more time with her, she was kind of a jealous. 
>> Although I tried to spend more time with her, she was still kind of jealous. 

She gossiped behind my back and I realized it afterward through other friends. 
>> She gossiped behind my back and I realized it afterwards through other friends. 

I was so angry about her on that time.
>> I was so angry at her that time. 

 She didn¡¯t feel sorry to me and I didn¡¯t want to forgive her. 
>>  She didn¡¯t feel sorry for me and I didn¡¯t want to forgive her. 

We didn¡¯t talk each other anymore after the fight. 
>> We didn¡¯t talk to each other anymore after the fight. 

It was affected my university life a lot. 
>> It affected my university life a lot. 

For instance, I had to make other friends because of her. 
>> CORRECT

I got through a tough time during my university life. 
>> I went through a tough time during my university life. 

I couldn¡¯t still forget the worst experience. 
>> I still couldn't  forget that experience. 

I don¡¯t want to get through one more time in my life. 
>> I don't want to go through that one more time in my life. 

It was the most terrible experience that I've ever had.
>> CORRECT
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