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When I worked as soldier, I was on night duty, and I was joking with my senior that I saw a ghost, and I remembered the troops going crazy because it happened to be North Korea's provocation. Now that I think about it, I'll never forget it because it's fun. :)

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When I worked as soldier, I was on night duty, and I was joking with my senior that I saw a ghost, and I remembered the troops going crazy because it happened to be North Korea's provocation.
>> When I worked as a soldier, I was on night duty and I was joking with my senior that I saw a ghost. I remembered the troops were going crazy because it happened to be North Korea's provocation.

Now that I think about it, I'll never forget it because it's fun. 
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