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Paster - Jisun is a faithful and active member at Henderson UMC. She did her best to visit members of Henderson UMC and they enjoy time with her very much. She is very passionate and supportive of church activities and worship services.

Hi, Elly!
I have to edit this article to apply for a scholarship. I need your help. thanks!!

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Hi Pastor Jisun,
Your writing composition is actually fantastic!
I just did some slight corrections.
May GOD HIMSELF open doors for you!
GOD bless you greatly pastor!
Teacher Elly. 
Thank you!!
I'm sure that this award will assist me to complete these goals. 
CORRECT!
or>>I'm certain that this award will help me in completing these goals. 
As a full-time mom, I am not able to get a job since parenting a 2-year-old baby, I need help with financial tuition now. 
>>As a full-time mom, I am not able to get a job since parenting a 2-year-old baby, I need help with my finances in order to pay for my tuition now. 
So If I get the chance to get this award, it will be a big help for me.
>>So If I get a chance to win this award, it will be a big help for me.
Paster - Jisun is a faithful and active member at Henderson UMC. 
>>Pastor Jisun is a faithful and an active member at the Henderson UMC. 
She did her best to visit members of Henderson UMC and they enjoy time with her very much. 
>>She does her best in visiting the members of Henderson UMC and they are enjoying their time with her very much. 
She is very passionate and supportive of church activities and worship services.
>>She is very passionate and supportive of the church activities and worship services.
Hi, Elly!
I have to edit this article to apply for a scholarship. I need your help. thanks!!
Hi, Elly!
CORRECT!
or>>I need this article edited in order to apply for a scholarship. I need your help please. thanks!!
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