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If you can change something about your lifestyle, what would it be and why?

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If I can do it, I would want to quit smoking. I've done for 5 years. Even though I know that smoking is bad for me, I can't still quit it until now. But now, It's a time to quit it.

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Hi Elic! 

Yes, that would be a big improvement in your lifestyle. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

If I can do it, I would want to quit smoking. 
>>  CORRECT

I've done for 5 years.
>> I've been doing this for 5 years.

Even though I know that smoking is bad for me, I can't still quit it until now. 
>> Even though I know that smoking is bad for me, I still can't quit it until now. 

But now, It's a time to quit it.
>> But now, it's time to quit it.

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