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There are so many pockets that it is sometimes convenient or not

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I usually put my wallet with business cards , my phone or a case of buzz in my pocket. Nowadays, we can do a lot with our cell phones, and we don¡¯t have to carry anything else like a wallet, cash or even a key. We live in a convenient world where we can do a lot with our mobile phones.

I would like to introduce you to an interesting story about pockets. There are so many pockets that it is sometimes convenient or not.
If I have a lot of pockets in my bag, I often don¡¯t know where I put things. I seem to be a bit forgetful these days.
Now I have to do something and I have to stop my interesting homework.

I expect and want to meet you in the next class. See you soon.

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Hello Elliot!

Wow, I hope you can see and appreciate the improvements you've made with your English writing skills. You are improving day by day, and I am so glad to have witnessed it. Thank you for sharing about the things you put in your pocket. I personally avoid putting important things in my pocket. I use a small bag instead. Your short narration about having too much pockets is really funny! me too! My bag has 3 main pockets and an inside pocket, but I still take time to search for the items I need in there 

For today's corrections, please note that when enumerating items, the last item before "and" should still be followed by a comma like that in the first and second sentence corrections.

Thank you for asnwering the homework, Elliot. It feels like talkting with you, even after our very short class time.
Keep it up!
-Teacher Violet


I usually put my wallet with business cards, my phone or a case of buzz in my pocket. 
>> I usually put my wallet with business cards, my phone, or a case of buzz in my pocket. 

Nowadays, we can do a lot with our cell phones, and we don¡¯t have to carry anything else like a wallet, cash or even a key. 
>> Nowadays, we can do a lot with our cell phones, and we don¡¯t have to carry anything else like a wallet, cash, or even a key. 

We live in a convenient world where we can do a lot with our mobile phones.
>> CORRECT!

I would like to introduce you to an interesting story about pockets. 
>> CORRECT!

There are so many pockets that it is sometimes convenient or not.
>> CORRECT!

If I have a lot of pockets in my bag, I often don¡¯t know where I put things. 
>> CORRECT!

I seem to be a bit forgetful these days.
>> CORRECT!

Now I have to do something and I have to stop my interesting homework.
>> CORRECT!

I expect and want to meet you in the next class. 
>> CORRECT!

See you soon.
>> CORRECT!
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