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Which part of your childhood do you wish you could change?

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I wish to change my childhood because now I don't play soccer. In the past, I was playing soccer with my friends. While playing soccer, I collied with a friend and broke my leg. I was very passionate about soccer and I still like it. So, I want to change the situation at the time.

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Wonderful day Jay!
It's hard to go back to your memories if your past is quite sad. Well, maybe you can try to do something that would make you passionate again, this time its not soccer :)
Thank you for letting me know your thought :)
T, Aki~
I wish to change my childhood because now I don't play soccer. 
>>> I wish to change my childhood because I don't play soccer now.
In the past, I was playing soccer with my friends. 
>>> Correct!
While playing soccer, I collied with a friend and broke my leg. 
>>> While playing soccer, I collided with a friend and broke my leg.
I was very passionate about soccer and I still like it. 
>>> Correct!
So, I want to change the situation at the time.
>>> Correct!
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