¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

The best place in my city

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: Çö*Áø
2022-04-19 791

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

I live in Ulsan, Korea and I have lived here since I was born.
I think I am pretty proud of my city, Ulsan and thus I\'m happy with my life staying here.
Your question made me think about the places that I find comfortable and interesting.
looking back on my memories of my city, I remember inviting my friends from other cities to my hometown.
Whenever I invited my friends here, I used to take them to almost the same places all the time.
Above all, I took them to the area called \'Samsan\' and there is a lot to see, enjoy and experience there.
For example, The restaurants over there do have whatever menu we want to eat.
I can just pick and grab something tasty as long as I have enough money. :)
Plus, We can enjoy shopping or watching movies and There are lots of pretty cafes and cool pubs.
There is also a Ferris Whee on the top floor of the department store and I always ride it with my friends.
All of my friends really enjoyed riding it because we could see a great night view.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Incredible, Elena! I am impressed by your writing. Most of the sentences and grammatically correct. I was also able to picture out your city through your answer. Keep it up!-Faith-
I live in Ulsan, Korea and I have lived here since I was born.
>> CORRECT
OR I was born and raised in Ulsan, Korea.
I think I am pretty proud of my city, Ulsan and thus I\'m happy with my life staying here.
>> I think I am pretty proud of my city, Ulsan and thus I'm happy with my life staying here.
Your question made me think about the places that I find comfortable and interesting.
>> CORRECT
looking back on my memories of my city, I remember inviting my friends from other cities to my hometown.
>> Looking back on my memories of my city, I remember inviting my friends from other cities to my hometown.
Whenever I invited my friends here, I used to take them to almost the same places all the time.
>> CORRECT
OR We would usually tour the same places.
Above all, I took them to the area called \'Samsan\' and there is a lot to see, enjoy and experience there.
>> Above all, I took them to the area called 'Samsan' and there is a lot to see, enjoy and experience there.
For example, The restaurants over there do have whatever menu we want to eat.
>> For example, the restaurants over there do have whatever menu we want to eat.
I can just pick and grab something tasty as long as I have enough money. :)
>> CORRECT
Plus, We can enjoy shopping or watching movies and There are lots of pretty cafes and cool pubs.
>> Plus, we can enjoy shopping or watching movies and there are lots of pretty cafes and cool pubs.
There is also a Ferris Whee on the top floor of the department store and I always ride it with my friends.
>> There is also a Ferris Wheel on the top floor of the department store and I always ride it with my friends.
All of my friends really enjoyed riding it because we could see a great night view.
>> CORRECT
OR We always had fun on it because it showed us a fantastic night view.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
116675 What physical feature attracts you the most? ÀÌ*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-22 1
116674 2022.2.21 Àü* ¿Ï·á 2022-02-22 422
116673 2022.2.18 Àü* ¿Ï·á 2022-02-22 638
116672 Homework ½Å*¾Æ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-22 0
116671 homework ¹Ú*¼Ò ¿Ï·á 2022-02-22 641
116670 My exercise ÀÌ*³ª ¿Ï·á 2022-02-22 600
116669 What is your favorite English movie and why? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2022-02-22 548
116668 Lesson Ȳ*±¸ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-22 453
116667 homework ¹Ú*¼Ò ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 535
116666 difficulties and problems at work ±è*±¹ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 5
116665 Tell me about your workplace ±è*±¹ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 8
116664 Do you believe in the saying ¡°Tell me who your friends are and... ¾ç*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 136
116663 What\'s the school project that you really like? / What\'s the... ÁÖ*ºó ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 279
116662 2/21 homework ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 145
116661 What do you wanna study in the future? Why? ÅÂ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 510
116660 What do you want to improve on your health? ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 2
116659 What are the benefits of short travels and long travels? Àå*¼ö ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 909
116658 homework ±è* ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 335
116657 Coffee shops ÀÌ*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 231
116656 What is your favorite English movie and why? Ȳ*º° ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 127

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04