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A stressful job with very high pay or a relaxing job with considerably low pay?

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I should choose a relaxing job with low pay. Because I want to take my time and work, And then it's good to have a career and move to a company that pays a lot of money.

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Hi Elic! 

I think that is a good choice. I would also pick that. Hahaha!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

I should choose a relaxing job with low pay. Because I want to take my time and work, 
>> I should choose a relaxing job with low pay because I want to have a life and work balance. 

And then it's good to have a career and move to a company that pays a lot of money.
>> It is good to have a career and move to a company that pays a lot of money as well. 
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