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If we do something in a rush, we feel crazy and it¡¯s easy to make mistakes. So we should manage our schedules before we are busy. Preparing in advance is a good way to avoid being in a rush.

Foreign visitors will visit our company after two or three months. In order not to be busy at that time, I need to prepare in advance. When I took a walk today. I made an introductory statement and practiced it.

Welcome to our company. I¡¯m a representative of the company.
I¡¯m very pleased to introduce our company to you. Our company is built for jobs for people with disabilities while serving the needs of clients so, one of the special things about our company is that people with disabilities work together. We have produced toothbrushes and dental floss. We print, pack, and deliver promotional items and souvenirs, recently we started producing sticker-type fire extinguishers.

I¡¯ve been thinking about this today. please check If possible
I don¡¯t want to be in a rush.

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Hello Elliot!

Thank you for sending in your input! I am sorry for the relatively late corrections, I had a lot of tasks at hand and it was a holiday after all.

ALL OF YOUR GRAMMAR AND SENTENCES ARE CORRECT!  The only corrections were on the merging or splicing of sentences, as well as punctuation and capitalization, which are all in written text. 
Good luck with your introduction! It was really nice and well said.
-Teacher Violet

If we do something in a rush, we feel crazy and it¡¯s easy to make mistakes. So we should manage our schedules before we are busy. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> If we do something in a rush, we feel crazy and it¡¯s easy to make mistakes, so we should manage our schedules before we are busy. 

Preparing in advance is a good way to avoid being in a rush.
>> CORRECT!

Foreign visitors will visit our company after two or three months. 
>> CORRECT!

In order not to be busy at that time, I need to prepare in advance. 
>> CORRECT!

When I took a walk today. I made an introductory statement and practiced it.
>> When I took a walk today, I made an introductory statement and practiced it.

Welcome to our company. 
>> CORRECT!

I¡¯m a representative of the company.
>> CORRECT!

I¡¯m very pleased to introduce our company to you. 
>> CORRECT!

Our company is built for jobs for people with disabilities while serving the needs of clients so, one of the special things about our company is that people with disabilities work together. 
>> CORRECT!

We have produced toothbrushes and dental floss. 
>> CORRECT!

We print, pack, and deliver promotional items and souvenirs, recently we started producing sticker-type fire extinguishers.
>>We print, pack, and deliver promotional items and souvenirs. Recently, we started producing sticker-type fire extinguishers.

I¡¯ve been thinking about this today. please check If possible
>>  I¡¯ve been thinking about this today. Please check If possible

I don¡¯t want to be in a rush.
>> CORRECT!
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