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K-culture was not famous few years ago, but there are many artists in various field from actors to singer. Especially, K-idols have shown great performance around the world. Asians only gave love to them before but nowadays most people in the world like K-idols. As a result, forenigners would like to know about my country. They want to learn Korean language and know our culture, food and even histories. There will be constructed K-pop Arena in the middle of Seoul. It will be the largest hall in my country. There isn't wonder that it provides a lot of benifit to fans and artists too. It is also expected that numerous grobal fans will visit Korea to be there. It is well known that there will be active economic effects if people gather in a same place. I strongly believe that people will visit to Arena and it will be a land mark in my country too.

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Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

K-culture was not famous few years ago, but there are many artists in various field from actors to singer. 
>> K-culture was not famous a few years ago, but there are many artists in various fields from actors to singers. 
Especially, K-idols have shown great performance around the world. 
>> Especially, K-idols have shown great performances around the world. 
Asians only gave love to them before but nowadays most people in the world like K-idols. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Before, only Asians give love to them, but nowadays, they are well-loved by people around the world.
As a result, forenigners would like to know about my country. 
>> As a result, foreigners would like to know about my country. 
They want to learn Korean language and know our culture, food and even histories. 
>> They want to learn the Korean language, culture, food, and even our history. 
There will be constructed K-pop Arena in the middle of Seoul. 
>> CORRECT!
It will be the largest hall in my country. 
>> CORRECT!
There isn't wonder that it provides a lot of benifit to fans and artists too. 
>> There isn't wonder that it provides a lot of benefit to fans and artists, too. 
It is also expected that numerous grobal fans will visit Korea to be there. 
>> It is also expected that numerous global fans will visit Korea to be there. 
It is well known that there will be active economic effects if people gather in a same place. 
>> It is well known that there will be active economic effects if people gather in the same place. 
I strongly believe that people will visit to Arena and it will be a land mark in my country too.
>> I strongly believe that people will visit the Arena, and it will be a land mark in my country too.

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