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To what degree do our names shape our personality?

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The answer depends on how much you care for your name or how much your culture or people around you value peoples' names. I have heard a lot about the meaning of my name from my father, who values Confucian values one of which is to live up to your name. Besides my father, people living a couple of decades ago were taught to obey Confucian values and rules, and they obeyed them and encouraged each other. Confucian values are not what they used to be in Korea. However, thanks to my father, I have been taught to live up to my name. As you know, a Korean name has a meaning in every letter. The letter 'young' means glory, the other letter 'Kyung' means shining. to put the two together, "shining glory in your life". My parents tend to put these in more biblically, that is, "shining God's glory in your life". Concerning my name, my mother dreamed where an enormous vessel was coming to her. Jesus was waving to her on board. Afterwards, she got pregnant. So I have tried to live up to my name.

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Hello Steve!

Thank you for answering the homework and explaining the meaning behind your given name. As I told you, I think this naming system is so lovely and adds a feeling of being special. If I was given a name so carefully thought of, then I would surely feel obligated to live up to it as well. 
 
I hope you had fun crafting your sentences for this output. As you can see, a majority of your sentences were spot on! Please note the first correction where we need to add a comma and the second correction where I think you overlooked a capitalization. The last ones are just suggestions to clarify the ideas. 

I cannot express how thankful I am for your consistent effort. 
Till next time!
-Teacher Violet 

The answer depends on how much you care for your name or how much your culture or people around you value peoples' names.
>> CORRECT!

I have heard a lot about the meaning of my name from my father, who values Confucian values one of which is to live up to your name. 
>> I have heard a lot about the meaning of my name from my father, who values Confucian values, one of which is to live up to your name. 

Besides my father, people living a couple of decades ago were taught to obey Confucian values and rules, and they obeyed them and encouraged each other. 
>> CORRECT!

Confucian values are not what they used to be in Korea. 
>> CORRECT!

However, thanks to my father, I have been taught to live up to my name. 
>> CORRECT!

As you know, a Korean name has a meaning in every letter. 
>> CORRECT!

The letter 'young' means glory, the other letter 'Kyung' means shining. 
>> CORRECT!

to put the two together, "shining glory in your life". 
>> To put the two together, "shining glory in your life". 

My parents tend to put these in more biblically, that is, "shining God's glory in your life". 
OR >> My parents tend to put these in a more biblical sense, that is, "shining God's glory in your life". 

Concerning my name, my mother dreamed where an enormous vessel was coming to her. 
>> Concerning my name, my mother dreamed that an enormous vessel was coming to her. 
OR >> Concerning my name, my mother had a dream where an enormous vessel was coming to her. 

Jesus was waving to her on board. 
>> CORRECT!

Afterward, she got pregnant. 
>> CORRECT!

So I have tried to live up to my name.
>> CORRECT!


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