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when i get worn out moment, i have a very simple solution that go to bed.
go to bed is very good solution. because when people get bad emotion like angry, tired they often action emotionally, but
sleep is to stop the emotion action and help wisdom action.

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Hi Ju Mi! Yeah! I agree that sleeping has a lot of benefits to our body and mind. Anyways,
Thanks for writing this composition. Keep safe and see you soon!



when i get worn out moment, i have a very simple solution that go to bed.

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When I get worn out, I have a very simple solution, which is going to bed.
go to bed is very good solution.
>>
Going to bed is a very good solution.
 because when people get bad emotion like angry, tired they often action emotionally, but
sleep is to stop the emotion action and help wisdom action.
>>
Because when people get bad emotions like anger or fatigue, they often act emotionally, but sleeping can
help to relieve emotions and can also increase our wisdom.
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