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What is the best memory you have of your family doing something together? Explain in detail.

I think it is when I was a go to Korea. But I don¡¯t remember minutely.

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Hi Anne! 

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Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

I think it is when I was a go to Korea. But I don¡¯t remember minutely.
>> I think it was the time when we went to South Korea but I don't remember everything that we did there. 
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