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Seoul is best city in South Korea.
Because traffic is so comfortble everywhere, subway and bus they are so fast.
And Seoul have a lot of work place. and then many people wants to live in Seoul.
Me too.
Seoul is representative city of Korea.

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Hi Ann! 

That place sounds great. No wonder it's very popular for the locals and foreigners. :) But yes, it can be quite expensive to live there. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

Seoul is best city in South Korea.
>> CORRECT

Because traffic is so comfortble everywhere, subway and bus they are so fast.
>> It is because the public transportation here is very comfortable. The bus and subways are very fast. 

And Seoul have a lot of work place. and then many people wants to live in Seoul.
>> There are a lot of work places in Seoul too that's why a lot of people want to live here. 

Me too.
>> I am one of them. 

Seoul is representative city of Korea.
>> Seoul is the representative city of Korea.

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