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The train is really punctual.

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I really enjoy doing homework. When I try to explain my opinion and make sentences in English, I feel very happy. Homework motivates me to improve my English. I¡¯m happy because of that.

Today¡¯s topic is my most favorite public vehicle. OK, I¡¯ll start with a happy heart.
My most favorite public vehicle is the train that I take everyday. The train is really punctual. This means that the departure time, the transit time, and the arrival time are almost constant. When I go to work and come back home everyday I usually take the train for almost 1 hour. Because where I ride is almost the end point, I can sit on a chair all the time so I am not tired. I don¡¯t like traffic jams. I¡¯ve never experienced traffic jams when using the train. I think it¡¯s the most important point, additionally the train fare is very cheap. I can save money. That¡¯s why I like the train.

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Hello Elliot,

Thank you for putting your heart into this output as well. I am very pleased that you do your best to improve every single time.

Your sentences are great! As you can see, you did a great job! There is one sentence that started in "because", but that one is actually acceptable because it is a complex sentence and you just switched the places of the two clauses. For the corrections, please avoid saying "most favorite" because favorite is already something you are most in favor of, so it will seem redundant or repetitive to do so. Next, 'Everyday' and 'every day' are a bit different. 'Everyday' one word, is an adjective meaning "used ir seen daily" or "ordinary". 'Every day', two words, is an adverb phrase which means "daily". A trick here is if you can put another word between "every" and "day" (like 'every single day'), you should use the two-word adverb. Also, please note the comma for "additionaly"

I hope you understood my comments! You can check them more if you want to understand further.
Thank you for your effort!
-Teacher Violet.

I really enjoy doing homework. 
>> CORRECT!

When I try to explain my opinion and make sentences in English, I feel very happy. 
>> CORRECT!

Homework motivates me to improve my English. 
>> CORRECT!

I¡¯m happy because of that.
>> CORRECT!

Today¡¯s topic is my most favorite public vehicle. 
>> Today¡¯s topic is my favorite public vehicle. 

OK, I¡¯ll start with a happy heart.
>> CORRECT!

My most favorite public vehicle is the train that I take everyday. 
>> My favorite public vehicle is the train that I take every day. 

The train is really punctual. 
>> CORRECT!

This means that the departure time, the transit time, and the arrival time are almost constant. 
>> CORRECT!

When I go to work and come back home everyday I usually take the train for almost 1 hour. 
>> When I go to work and come back home every day, I usually take the train for almost 1 hour. 

Because where I ride is almost the end point, I can sit on a chair all the time so I am not tired. 
>> Because where I ride is almost the endpoint, I can sit on a chair all the time so I am not tired. 

I don¡¯t like traffic jams. 
>> CORRECT!

I¡¯ve never experienced traffic jams when using the train. 
>> CORRECT!

I think it¡¯s the most important point, additionally the train fare is very cheap. 
>> I think it¡¯s the most important point, additionally, the train fare is very cheap. 

I can save money. 
>> CORRECT!

That¡¯s why I like the train.
>> CORRECT!

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