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How should someone who committed a crime for some good cause be punished?

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I think that people should be less punished. Although they committed a crime so it is illegal in law, but because it was a good cause, so it should be considered. For example, someone who has family killed by murder, so if he or she avenge a murderer by anger, then it should be understood. OR... if they saw someone has difficulty to carry something, so they were willing to help he or she, but while helping carrying, that thing was broken or had damage by mistakes, so even if that person called police because of demaging, that behavior was from good mind, so it should be less punished.

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Happy Monday Yun Su!
Thank you for doing your homework. Great job in expressing your thought regarding our topic. Keep it up.
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I think that people should be less punished. 
>> I think their punishment should be lessened.
Although they committed a crime so it is illegal in law, but because it was a good cause, so it should be considered. 
>> Although they committed a crime, which is illegal, but that crime is for a good cause, I think that should be considered.
For example, someone who has family killed by murder, so if he or she avenge a murderer by anger, then it should be understood. 
>> For example, A family member killed by a murderer. Other family members wanting to take revenge should be understood.
OR... if they saw someone has difficulty to carry something, so they were willing to help he or she, 
>>  Another situation, If someone helped another person who is having difficulty in carrying something.
but while helping carrying, that thing was broken or had damage by mistakes, 
>> But while helping, the item that they are carrying broke or was damaged by mistake.
so even if that person called police because of demaging, that behavior was from good mind,  so it should be less punished.
>> So even if it was reported to the police, they should still acknowledge that that person helped and should receive lesser punishment.
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