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My English performance evaluation

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2022-04-08 401

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The restaurant I really want to recommend is Sunsikdang.
There are many menus,but among them, I want to recommend salad and fried rice.
There is cream cheese on the salad, and almonds are on top of it.
So the salad taste is very harmonious.
Next, fried rice has a savory taste that can only be tasted at this restaurant.
So I want to recommend these two menus.
Next, the good thing about this restaurant is that the amount of food is large compared to the price.
But one disadvantage is that some chairs are old and dirty.
Especially, fried rice has the most portion.
Therefore, I would like to say to the owner,"Salad and fried rice are the best among the foods and you are really the best at cooking."

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Hello, Sarah! 

Thank you for submitting your composition.
I have checked and modified it. 
Please check it out and good luck! ^^ 

You can do it! Again, enjoy the weekend! 

~ Teacher Gina

The restaurant I really want to recommend is Sunsikdang.
There are many menus,but among them, I want to recommend salad and fried rice.
There is cream cheese on the salad, and almonds are on top of it.
So the salad taste is very harmonious.
Next, fried rice has a savory taste that can only be tasted at this restaurant.
So I want to recommend these two menus.
Next, the good thing about this restaurant is that the amount of food is large compared to the price.
But one disadvantage is that some chairs are old and dirty.
Especially, fried rice has the most portion.
Therefore, I would like to say to the owner,"Salad and fried rice are the best among the foods and you are really the best at cooking."

>> The restaurant I want to recommend is Sunsikdang.

There are many menus, but I want to recommend salad and fried rice among them.

There is cream cheese on the salad, and almonds are on top of it.

So the salad taste is very harmonious.

Next, fried rice has a savory taste which you can only try at this restaurant.

So I want to recommend these two menus.

But one disadvantage is that some chairs are old and dirty.

However, another good thing about this restaurant is that the amount of food is large compared to the price.

Especially fried rice has the most portion.

Therefore, I would like to tell the owner, "Salad and fried rice are the best among the foods, and you are the best at cooking."

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