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Studying needs motivation

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I can be recognized by teacher as a good student with a test. I think it can be motivation to study hard. So, I can get better score at next exam by this motivation. However, since exam is one of the biggest stress to students, it can drop student's grade. Some of the students give up studying because of the exam. It can be pros and cons, but I think exam is vital for students. In my opinion, in the school competition is necessary. Students can compete with their friends with their grades. It make students study more hard. Since studying needs motivation, I think test will make students to better people.

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I can be recognized by teacher as a good student with a test. 
>> My teacher can recognize me as a good student through a test.

I think it can be motivation to study hard. So, I can get better score at next exam by this motivation.
>> I think it can be a means to motivate me to study hard so I can get a better test score next time.

However, since exam is one of the biggest stress to students, it can drop student's grade.
>> However, since an exam is one of the things that stresses students the most, it can affect the students' grades.

Some of the students give up studying because of the exam. 
>> Some students give up studying because of tests.

It can be pros and cons, but I think exam is vital for students. 
>> There are pros and cons, but I think they are vital for students.

In my opinion, in the school competition is necessary.
>> In my opinion, competition in schools is necessary.

 Students can compete with their friends with their grades.
>> This is a good sentence.

 It make students study more hard. 
>> It makes students study harder.

Since studying needs motivation, I think test will make students to better people.
>> Since studying needs motivation, I think tests will make students better people.
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