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What are the positive and negative ways some people choose to deal with stress?

I think talking about the stress is a positive way to deal with strss. While talking about stress, we can find what or why are we being stressful. And we can also get some advice and comfort from close friends.

In contrast, some people don't want to share bad things with others. One reason is they are a thoughtful person, and they don't want to bother their friends. Another is they are just feel embarrassed and want to avoid the problem, deceive them selves. But being honest with one's personal feeling is the most important step to solve the problem.

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Hi there Jane!
Our hands are both free at this moment ^^. We're seeing each other eye to eye
Thank you for letting me understand your mind :)
Take care!
Aki~

I think talking about the stress is a positive way to deal with strss. 
>>> I think talking about stress is a positive way to deal with stress. 
While talking about stress, we can find what or why are we being stressful. 
>>>While talking about stress, we can find what or why are we being stressed. 
And we can also get some advice and comfort from close friends.
>>> CORRECT!
In contrast, some people don't want to share bad things with others. 
>>> CORRECT!
One reason is they are a thoughtful person, and they don't want to bother their friends. 
>>> CORRECT!
Another is they are just feel embarrassed and want to avoid the problem, deceive them selves. 
>>> Another is they just feel embarrassed and want to avoid the problem, deceiving themselves.  
But being honest with one's personal feeling is the most important step to solve the problem.
>>> But being honest with one's personal feelings is the most important step to solving the problem.
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