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Are you afraid of getting old? Why or why not?

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Actually, I am afraid of getting old.
I think almost young people will afraid of getting old.
Young people care about their appearance a lot, and so am I.
But the thing that I afraid of getting old the most is getting weaker.
It will be very hard to protect ourselves if we are weaker than now.
And also it will be harder to move and active freely.
My eyes, ears, and other parts of my body may get disabled if I get older.
Because of these things, I am afraid of getting older.

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Hi John! 

Yes, we need to value our time always. We're not getting any younger these days so we should enjoy life as much as we can. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Actually, I am afraid of getting old.
>> CORRECT

I think almost young people will afraid of getting old.
>> I think most young people do. 

Young people care about their appearance a lot, and so am I.
>> Young people care about their appearance a lot and so do I.

But the thing that I afraid of getting old the most is getting weaker.
>> But the thing that I am afraid of the most is getting weaker.

It will be very hard to protect ourselves if we are weaker than now.
>> CORRECT

And also it will be harder to move and active freely.
>> 
Also, it will be harder to move actively and freely. 

My eyes, ears, and other parts of my body may get disabled if I get older.
>> Some of my body parts might get disabled. 

Because of these things, I am afraid of getting older.
>> CORRECT
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