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Q:What can children learn by having a pet?
A:Children can learn about intimacy, bonding and good personality.
If children really love their pet, then they would like to play with their pet.
Then they can learn intimacy, bonding, by playing with their pet, and they can learn good personality by being good to their pet.
Also, they can learn many thing about life when they are sad about the death of their pet.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

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Here are my corrections for you:


Children can learn about intimacy, bonding and good personality.

>> Children can learn about intimacy, bonding, and good personality.
If children really love their pet, then they would like to play with their pet.

>> CORRECT!
Then they can learn intimacy, bonding, by playing with their pet, 

>> Then they can learn intimacy and bonding by playing with their pet, 

and they can learn good personality by being good to their pet.

>> They can learn to have a good personality by being good to their pet.
Also, they can learn many thing about life when they are sad about the death of their pet.

>> Also, they can learn many things about life when they feel sad about the death of their pet.

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