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Do you think there is still inequality between men and women there in South Korea?

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Of course, You're still a man, so you have to do it and can't do it as a man? There's a culture like this in South Korea. And why do that as a woman? These things still exist.

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Hi Elic! 

Inequality is never okay. There shouldn't be any boundaries or limitations on what a man or a woman can and can't do. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Of course, You're still a man, so you have to do it and can't do it as a man? 
>> There is a culture where in you need to do certain things because you are a man. They also question you, "Why can't you do it? You are a man!"

There's a culture like this in South Korea. 
>> CORRECT

And why do that as a woman? These things still exist.
>> And they always question why women do such things. These things still exist. 
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