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When I get in stress, I shout very short and loud.
And I eating many food.
For example I eat very spicy food.
Since I was young I like spicy food, so when I'm stressed out I eat spicy tteokbokki.
When after ate of spicy tteokbokki I feel very comfortable.

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Hi, Ms. Kyu!

Stress is a part of everyone's life. So, when we feel this, we have to be able to overcome it. Eating spicy food was also one of my favorite things to do to relax. 

I am sure that you have more ways of relieving yourself from stress like going out with your friends, among others. So, stay away from stress and take it easy with your problems.

Great job on this homework! Thank you for your effort always.

-T. Donna =)

When I get in stress, I shout very short and loud.
>> When I get stressed, I shout very shortly and loudly.

And I eating many food.
>> And, I eat a lot of food.

For example I eat very spicy food.
>> Correct!
Or: For example, I eat very spicy food.

Since I was young I like spicy food, so when I'm stressed out I eat spicy tteokbokki.
>> Correct!

When after ate of spicy tteokbokki I feel very comfortable.
>> Then, after I ate of spicy tteokbokki, I feel very comfortable.
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