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Music power is so strong

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There's a song that I'm really into these days.
The song is 'When I'm still getting over you'.
Singer is Peter Elias. I love his voice.
It's really soft and strong.
Sometimes make me cry and make a smile.
Music power is so strong.
When I heard a song my mind followed that song's atmospher.
It's like magic.
That's why I love music:)

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Hi Ann! 

Oh, I've never heard of that song. I'll look it up. It sounds interesting. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

There's a song that I'm really into these days.
>> CORRECT

The song is 'When I'm still getting over you'.
>> The song is "When I'm still getting over you".

Singer is Peter Elias. 
>> The singer is Peter Elias. 

I love his voice.
>> CORRECT

It's really soft and strong.
>> CORRECT

Sometimes make me cry and make a smile.
>> He sometimes make me smile and cry. 

Music power is so strong.
>> The power of music is strong 

When I heard a song my mind followed that song's atmospher.
>> When I hear this song, my mind follows it's atmosphere. 

It's like magic.
>> CORRECT

That's why I love music:)
>> This is why I love music. 
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