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What do you think is the most dangerous eye problem? Why?

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I think the most dangerous eye problem is ¡®decreased eye vision¡¯, since it¡¯s not be recovered. Only the way of recovery low eye vision is getting eye vision surgery. But the price for getting the operation is very expensive and it can have side effects. So taking care of the eyesight in advance is very important.

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Good day, Elena!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


I think the most dangerous eye problem is ¡®decreased eye vision¡¯, since it¡¯s not be recovered. 
>> I think the most dangerous eye problem is ¡®decreased eye vision¡¯, since there's no recovery for it yet. 
Only the way of recovery low eye vision is getting eye vision surgery. 
>> The only way to recover from a low eye vision is by getting an eye vision surgery. 
OR >> The only way to recover from a low eye vision is by getting an eye  surgery. 
But the price for getting the operation is very expensive and it can have side effects. 
>> CORRECT!
So taking care of the eyesight in advance is very important.
>> CORRECT!
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