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What do you think is the best TV show and why?

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I think that the best TV show is "Running man." It is a K- TV show. It is famous in Korea and is broadcasted on Sunday. It is fun so, I can smile without useless thoughts. So, I'm thankful to characters. / "Superman is back" is also the best TV show. In the TV show, we can see celebrities' children and their lives. Through it, some parents can know a way to raise their children well. Also, people can know that celebrities' children's lives are not different from our lives. (These are my personal thoughts.)

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Hi Kimberly! 

Running man is also my favorite. I usually watch it during my free time. It's undeniably a very funny show. It is famous amongst my students. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think that the best TV show is "Running man."
>> CORRECT

It is a K- TV show. 
>> It is a Korean TV show. 

It is famous in Korea and is broadcasted on Sunday. 
>> It is famous in Korea and is broadcasted on Sundays. 

It is fun so, I can smile without useless thoughts. 
>> It is so fun and smile even because of the smallest things. 

So, I'm thankful to characters.
>> I am thankful for the characters of that show. 

 "Superman is back" is also the best TV show. 
>> "Superman is back" is also a good TV show. 

In the TV show, we can see celebrities' children and their lives. 
>> In this TV show, we can see celebrities' children and their lives. 

Through it, some parents can know a way to raise their children well. 
>> Through it, some parents can know ways on how to raise their children well. 

Also, people can know that celebrities' children's lives are not different from our lives. 
>> CORRECT

(These are my personal thoughts.)
>>These are just my personal thoughts. 

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