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Hi, teacher!
My family have a very good relationship. My husband and me are elemantary school's friends so we have a lot of same think.
Before we got a marriage many fight but nowadays we don't fight.
My house's mood is very delight and vigorous. Also our children is very happy and fun. We have a enjoying time during travel and watch the movie and we eat delicious food.
Our family have a lot of time together and we are happy!!

P.s. This photo is my family. We went to Hawaii in 2019.

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Good evening, Ms. Kyu!

I hope that everything went well with your Zoom meeting with the Canadian agency today. Anyway, this photo looks like you had so much fun and just enjoying yourselves in Hawaii. The sea looks calm and your children are so adorable! I think that you look like your son and your daughter looks like her father.

Anyway, thank you for sharing these information on what your family is like and the things that you all love doing together. Making great memories is the best to remember your children's childhood when they grow older and when you reach old age. So continue making more in the future.

Excellent job on your writing because you used very good vocabulary like 'vigorous'!

See you again in class next week!

-T. Donna =)

My husband and me are elemantary school's friends so we have a lot of same think.
>> My husband and I are elementary school friends so we have a lot of same thinking.

Before we got a marriage many fight but nowadays we don't fight.
>> Before we got married we had many fights but nowadays we don't fight.

My house's mood is very delight and vigorous.
>> My house's mood is very delightful and vigorous.

Also our children is very happy and fun.
>>  Also our children are very happy and fun.

We have a enjoying time during travel and watch the movie and we eat delicious food.
>> We have an enjoyable time during travel and we watch the movie and we eat delicious food.

Our family have a lot of time together and we are happy!!
>> Our family has a lot of time together and we are happy!

P.s. This photo is my family. We went to Hawaii in 2019.
>> Correct!
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