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Do you think it is important for men to join the military service in South Korea? Why or why not?

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I think it is important for men to join the military service in South Korea.
Because someone have to defend our countries.

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Hi John! 

Yes, that's true. This is for the safety and protection of South Korea against other countries that wants to colonize it. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.


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