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Do you think it is important for men to join the military service in South Korea? Why or why not?

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I think it is important for men to join the military service in South Korea.
Because someone have to defend our countries.

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Hi John! 

Yes, that's true. This is for the safety and protection of South Korea against other countries that wants to colonize it. 

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