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What would the world be like without plastic?

작성자: 김*인
2022-03-22 858

회원님의 영작문

Plastic is helpful material to people's lives, hence the amount of usage is raised more and more. Modern lives cannot maintain without a disposable product, because plastic can increase the quality of life. For example, plastic is very light; therefore, people can bring it everywhere that they go. However, if plastic is not allowed, people have to use glass or metal. It is very heavy and not portable, hence people need to spend a lot of time and strength. Nevertheless, it means not that there are no advantages. If people live except plastic, the environment will find its own pace. Nature struggle with a lot of plastic garbage currently, and it gets worse and worse. For these reasons, if people don't use plastic, the animals and nature will be cleaned. In conclusion, using plastic has both parts of advantages and disadvantages. Although it is helpful and useful to people's daily lives, it affects negatively nature. So people need to remain balanced for the environment.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Jin!
Your opinion is realistic.  Well, we need it even if we ban its usage.  But the important thing here is to balance and learn how to recycle and reuse it.  We are not only the ones living on Earth.  We should consider the other living things. ^^

~T. Maine

Plastic is helpful material to people's lives, hence the amount of usage is raised more and more. 
>>Plastic is a helpful material to people's lives, hence the amount of usage is increased more. 
Modern lives cannot maintain without a disposable product, because plastic can increase the quality of life. 
>>Modern lives cannot be maintained without a disposable product because plastic can increase the quality of life. 
For example, plastic is very light; therefore, people can bring it everywhere that they go.
>>For example, plastic is very light; therefore, people can bring it everywhere they go. 
However, if plastic is not allowed, people have to use glass or metal. 
>>Correct. 
It is very heavy and not portable, hence people need to spend a lot of time and strength. 
>>Correct. 
Nevertheless, it means not that there are no advantages. 
>>Correct. 
If people live except plastic, the environment will find its own pace.
>>If people live without plastic, the environment will find its own pace. 
Nature struggle with a lot of plastic garbage currently, and it gets worse and worse. 
>>Nature struggles with a lot of plastic garbage currently, and it gets worse and worse. 
For these reasons, if people don't use plastic, the animals and nature will be cleaned. 
>>Correct. 
In conclusion, using plastic has both parts of advantages and disadvantages. 
>>In conclusion, using plastic has both advantages and disadvantages. 
Although it is helpful and useful to people's daily lives, it affects negatively nature. 
>>Although it is helpful and useful to people's daily lives, it affects nature negatively.
So people need to remain balanced for the environment.
>>Correct. 

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