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Of course, I want to be seated in a non-smoking area. Because I have never smoked a cigarette and I hate cigarette smoke. so, I really don¡¯t want to be seated in a smoking area.

In KOREA, People shouldn¡¯t smoke indoors such as all buildings or all transportations and more.
In particular if you are with someone who doesn¡¯t smoke, you shouldn¡¯t smoke near them. Almost all Koreans do that. I think it is a good culture and good common sense. But it wasn¡¯t like this about 10 years ago and nowadays some people don¡¯t follow this common sense. I think this is unavoidable.

Although smoking isn¡¯t good for health. I think smoking is a personal choice. If we acknowledge and take care of each other, more people will be happy.
Anyway, I think, If possible, it is better not to smoke.

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Hello!


Thank you so much for answering this homework! I am a bit envious of the system that you mentioned. Here in the Philippines, there are allotted spaces for vaping, but I think smoking areas are not so common. Some people on public roads still smoke despite being in crowds. I really hate the smell of smoke too.


Anyway, for today, there are still words that are better joined as one. We don't usually use 'And, Because, But" etc at the beginning of the sentence. If so, probably, you can join the second sentence wioth the first sentence as a second clause.


Again, great job! You explained it so well.

-Teacher Violet.



Of course, I want to be seated in a non-smoking area. Because I have never smoked a cigarette and I hate cigarette smoke. 

>> Of course, I want to be seated in a non-smoking area because I have never smoked a cigarette and I hate cigarette smoke. 


so, I really don¡¯t want to be seated in a smoking area.

>> So, I really don¡¯t want to be seated in a smoking area.


In KOREA, People shouldn¡¯t smoke indoors such as all buildings or all transportations and more.

>> In Korea, people shouldn¡¯t smoke indoors such as in all buildings or all transportation, and more.


In particular if you are with someone who doesn¡¯t smoke, you shouldn¡¯t smoke near them. 

>> In particular, if you are with someone who doesn¡¯t smoke, you shouldn¡¯t smoke near them. 


Almost all Koreans do that. 

>> CORRECT!

I think it is a good culture and good common sense. But it wasn¡¯t like this about 10 years ago and nowadays some people don¡¯t follow this common sense. 

>> I think it is a good culture and good common sense but it wasn¡¯t like this about 10 years ago and nowadays some people don¡¯t follow this common sense. 


I think this is unavoidable.

>> CORRECT!

Although smoking isn¡¯t good for health. I think smoking is a personal choice. 

>> CORRECT!

If we acknowledge and take care of each other, more people will be happy.

>> CORRECT!

Anyway, I think, If possible, it is better not to smoke.

>> CORRECT!

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