¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Do you want to change something in your appearance? Why or why not? Explain in detail.

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ·ù*ÁÖ
2022-03-18 1185

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

I don't want to change anything in my appearance yet, but I'm worrying about my height.
I'm tall at my age, but I can't sure that I will grow more later.
So I'm worrying about my height.
But I don't care about it that much, and I think I will grow more.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi John! 

Yes, we should be contented with what we have in life. Our appearance brings us character. It's our identity. 

PS: I think your height will become taller as time goes by. You're still young anyway. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don't want to change anything in my appearance yet, but I'm worrying about my height.
>> I don't want to change anything in my appearance but I am a little bit worries about my height. 

I'm tall at my age, but I can't sure that I will grow more later.
>> I am tall for my age now but I am not sure if I will grow much taller. 

So I'm worrying about my height.
>> This is why I worry about my height. 

But I don't care about it that much, and I think I will grow more.
>> Although, I don't care about it that much and I think that I will still grow taller. 
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
118786 Your help is needed for then Green Cross account ÃÖ*ÈÆ ¿Ï·á 2022-05-06 1
118785 Long time no connection ÃÖ*ÈÆ ¿Ï·á 2022-05-06 1
118784 samsung clean core:BTP opportunity for services ÃÖ*ÈÆ ¿Ï·á 2022-05-06 0
118783 science È«*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2022-05-06 277
118782 How important is reading comprehension and how is it measured? /... ÁÖ*ºó ¿Ï·á 2022-05-06 267
118781 Homework Àå*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2022-05-06 225
118780 Homework Á¤*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2022-05-06 216
118779 What is the best thing that happened to you while living in... ¼­*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-05-06 1
118778 What do you do if you failed to get what you want? ±è*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-05-06 342
118777 What personality trait would you like to develop and why? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2022-05-06 380
118776 5/5 HOMEWORK (TODAY IS CHILDREN\'S... ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2022-05-05 270
118775 What other jobs did you have in the past? ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2022-05-05 2
118774 homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-05-05 214
118773 Best and Worst ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2022-05-05 282
118772 In your opinion, Is aging more difficult for men or women? Why? ±è*Áö ¿Ï·á 2022-05-05 254
118771 Money ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-05-05 2
118770 Homework ±â*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-05-05 213
118769 Homework ±â*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-05-05 301
118768 HOMEWORK ¹Ú*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2022-05-05 3
118767 Homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-05-05 1

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04