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These day, I have a lot of thinking.
I don't know why I feel so strange.
feel like one of part heart is empty and lonely.
Now I think I'm in a difficult situation mentally.
I'm really busy, but I don't know how to deal with this empty feeling.

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Hi Anne! 

I notice that too. This has been your problem for a while. It actually saddens me. We go through these kinds of phases in our lives but don't worry. Everything will eventually make sense. Just be patient and focus on yourself. I'm always here for you. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

These day, I have a lot of thinking.
>> These days, I haven't been thinking a lot. 

I don't know why I feel so strange.
>> CORRECT

feel like one of part heart is empty and lonely.
>> It feels like one part of my heart is lonely and empty. 

Now I think I'm in a difficult situation mentally.
>> I think that I'm in a difficult situation mentally. 

I'm really busy, but I don't know how to deal with this empty feeling.
>> CORRECT
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