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What are the ways to slow down aging?

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What are the ways to slow down aging?

The first one can be exercising a lot. For example, I watched a TV program which shows one grandmother's muscle. It looked very nice, and she also looked much younger than her real age.
The second one is studying or working until the dead. Because the human must work everyday. If there is a long vacation or retirement, we should find another job or find other habits. Just being a couch potato makes us fast aging.
Last one is being happy.. Thinking positive can help you to live fresher and more energetic.
You don't need to do all things which I said above, but it can be helpful to slow down aging.

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Hi, Yun Su!
Thank you for doing your homework. I agree with all the things that you've mentioned here. It can help us to be young physically, mentally and emotionally.
-T. Caitlyn
What are the ways to slow down aging?
>>CORRECT
The first one can be exercising a lot. 
>> The first one is exercising.
For example, I watched a TV program which shows one grandmother's muscle. 
>>For example, i watched a TV program and in the show I saw a grandmother with muscles.
It looked very nice, and she also looked much younger than her real age.
>>CORRECT
The second one is studying or working until the dead. 
>> The second one is studying or working.
Because the human must work everyday. 
>>Working can also help humans to age slower.
If there is a long vacation or retirement, we should find another job or find other habits.
>>If there is a long vacation or during retirement, we should look for another job or find a new hobby.
Just being a couch potato makes us fast aging.
>> Being a couch potato makes us age faster.
Last one is being happy.. 
>>Lastly, being happy.
Thinking positive can help you to live fresher and more energetic.
>>Being optimistic can help you to live fresher and be more energetic.
You don't need to do all things which I said above, but it can be helpful to slow down aging.
>>You don't need to do everything that I mentioned above, but it can be helpful to slow down aging.
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