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One of my favorite movies is "the Sound of Music". As long as I know, the scenes were filmed in Salzburg, Austria. I would love to fly to every location where the movie was filmed.
I love the hill where Julie Andrews taught Captain von Trapp's children how to sing to welcome their father and uncle.
I love the dancing hall where von Trapp's children said goodbye to all guests with singing and dancing.
I love the dining room where Julie Andrews made all children cry with heartwarming words.
I love the bedroom where all children got together and sing together to shake off their fears of thunder. I learned how to treat frightened children from Julie Andrews comforting them with encouragement.
I love the balcony where Christopher Plummer confessed his love for Julie Andrews bravely in front of Eleanor Parker. More scenes blew my mind.
I got a chance to come near the hill where Julie Andrews sang with children. However, I was on a business trip. I couldn't make time to go there.

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Wow, Steve!

Thank you for this entry! It was incredibly detailed and I was carried by the emotions you described. That opportunity was amazing so it must be so frustrating when you weren't able to spend time visiting the areas you yearn to visit. Even I felt the frustration! Thank you again for sharing about it. 

For today's corrections, please note the capitalization of every word in the title. There were also very simple corrections on proper word choice and don't forget to add "the" or articles in general.

Great work!
-Teacher Violet.

One of my favorite movies is "the Sound of Music". 

>> One of my favorite movies is "The Sound of Music".


As long as I know, the scenes were filmed in Salzburg, Austria. 

>> As far as I know, the scenes were filmed in Salzburg, Austria. 


I would love to fly to every location where the movie was filmed.
>> CORRECT!

I love the hill where Julie Andrews taught Captain von Trapp's children how to sing to welcome their father and uncle.
>> CORRECT!

I love the dancing hall where von Trapp's children said goodbye to all guests with singing and dancing.
>> CORRECT!

I love the dining room where Julie Andrews made all children cry with heartwarming words.
>> CORRECT!

I love the bedroom where all children got together and sing together to shake off their fears of thunder. 

>> I love the bedroom where all the children get together and sing together to shake off their fears of thunder.


I learned how to treat frightened children from Julie Andrews comforting them with encouragement.
>> CORRECT!

I love the balcony where Christopher Plummer confessed his love for Julie Andrews bravely in front of Eleanor Parker.
>> CORRECT!

More scenes blew my mind.
>> CORRECT!

I got a chance to come near the hill where Julie Andrews sang with children. 
>> CORRECT!

However, I was on a business trip. 
>> CORRECT!

I couldn't make time to go there.
>> CORRECT!

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