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If you could change your name would you? What would it be? Why this name?

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I wouldn't. Because I'm already satisfied with my name and my parents gave me the name after thinking. My sister's name is Sujin and my name is Yejin. My name can show the bond with my sister.

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Hello Rachel!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I wouldn't. Because I'm already satisfied with my name and my parents gave me the name after thinking. 

>> I wouldn't because I'm already satisfied with my name and my parents gave me my name after a lot of thought. 

My sister's name is Sujin and my name is Yejin. 

>> CORRECT!

My name can show the bond with my sister.

>> My name can show the bond I have with my sister.

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