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I think cooking is not an art

작성자: 황*구
2022-03-11 678

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Hi andrea!
Today's topic was triblely hard for me.
Actually when I red the preperation, I though I need to pass this topic. I was supposed to say "let's go on the next page. But if I want to improve my English skills I thoght "I have to! I can overcome it!"
However, it was failed : )

some chefs consider cooking as an art. But I don't think so. Plating is of course important part of cooking. There is a saying in Korea about food. "Something to eat that looks nice must be tasty." (I'm not sure if it's good translation.) But some restaurants have some menu that just looks good but not tasty, not satisfying even not balenced on nutrition. And they just say "it's an art."
The more Social network service has been big the more such restaurants have came up.
I understand because that is one of their survival strategies in market.
I don't want to blame and judge them.

But I think just serving quickly, satisfying srrvice and comport mood are more important. Art is the next.

Thank you!!!^^

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Q!^^ 

I believe every people has their own way of defining the word art. 
I am not artistic. LOL 
I envy people who are good with arts. 
If only I could draw, I would love to draw the sunset. 

Anyways. I don't think that you failed on this topic. 
You just have to express your opinion. :) 

Teacher Andrea

Today's topic was triblely hard for me.
>> Today's topic was terribly hard for me. 

Actually when I red the preperation, I though I need to pass this topic.
>> Actually, when I read the preparation, I thought of skipping this topic. 

I was supposed to say "let's go on the next page. But if I want to improve my English skills I thoght "I have to! I can overcome it!"
>> I was suppose to say, "Let's go on the next page." , but if I want to improve my English skill I thought I should overcome it.

However, it was failed : )
>> However, it was a fail. 

some chefs consider cooking as an art. But I don't think so
>> Some chefs consider cooking as an art but I don' think so. 

Plating is of course important part of cooking.
>> Plating is of course an important art of cooking. 

There is a saying in Korea about food. "Something to eat that looks nice must be tasty." 
>> Correct 
>> OR: Something that looks appetizing must be tasty. 

(I'm not sure if it's good translation.) 
>> (I'm not sure if it's a good translation.) 

But some restaurants have some menu that just looks good but not tasty, not satisfying even not balenced on nutrition.
>>  But some restaurants have some menu that just looks good but not tasty, not even  satisfying, and does not have a well balanced nutrition. 
 
And they just say "it's an art."
>> Correct 

The more Social network service has been big the more such restaurants have came up.
>> SNS became bigger, thus, more restaurants were also established. 

I understand because that is one of their survival strategies in market.
>> Correct 

I don't want to blame and judge them.
>> Correct 

But I think just serving quickly, satisfying srrvice and comport mood are more important. 
>> But I think just customer service, customer satisfaction, and  ambiance are more important. 

Art is the next.
>> Art is secondary. 
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