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In your opinion, How has the media affected society? Has TV made society better or worse?
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It is not the media that affects people. It is the contents of the media. The only good point of the diversity of the media is that people can contact with any news at any time
The problem is false news. In this super-fast changing society, everyone can produce and spread any news, whether it¡¯s false or not. And the fact that anyone can get any news whenever he wants makes people think less, because it would only take less than one minute to find the news, and thus follow and easely agree on the other¡¯s opinion without an effort to double-checking the fact of the news

And TV made this present society better. It shows the past, the present and the future. It helps us to understand about our surroundings and make a better decision

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Hello, U Seung! 

Thank you for sharing your opinion and ideas on this topic.
Talk to you later~

~T. Roanne ^_^
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It is not the media that affects people.
>>It is not the media that affect people. 
It is the contents of the media. 
>> Correct!
The only good point of the diversity of the media is that people can contact with any news at any time
>> The only good point of the diversity of the media is that people can contact with any news at any time.
The problem is false news. In this super-fast changing society, everyone can produce and spread any news, whether it¡¯s false or not. 
>> The problem is the false news. In this super-fast changing society, everyone can produce and spread any news, whether it¡¯s false or not. 
And the fact that anyone can get any news whenever he wants makes people think less, because it would only take less than one minute to find the news, and thus follow and easely agree on the other¡¯s opinion without an effort to double-checking the fact of the news
>>And the fact that anyone can get any news whenever he wants makes people think less, because it would only take less than one minute to find the news, and thus follow and easily agree on the other¡¯s opinion without an effort to double-check the fact of the news..
And TV made this present society better. It shows the past, the present and the future. 
>> Correct!
It helps us to understand about our surroundings and make a better decision
>> It helps us to understand about our surroundings and make a better decision.
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