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What is your reaction now that Yoon Seok-youl is the new president of South Korea? What do you think

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When I knew that Yoon Seok-youl became the new president, I was very surprised because I saw some people's opinions before the result is announced. Some people said "Yoon Seok-youl is not enough to be the new president. So, I thought that people will vote Lee Jaemyeong instead of Yoon Seok-youl. However, the result was contrary. This is why I was surprised When I knew that Yoon Seok-youl became the new president. / In fact, I don't know what can he do for my country. Just, I hope that he does his best for Koreans. Please....

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Hi Kimberly!
 
Koreans have mixed emotions about this. Let's just hope that the elected president will do well during his term. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

When I knew that Yoon Seok-youl became the new president, I was very surprised because I saw some people's opinions before the result is announced. 
>> When I found out that Yoon Seok-youl became the new president, I was very surprised because I saw some people's opinions before the result was announced.
 
Some people said "Yoon Seok-youl is not enough to be the new president. 
>> CORRECT

So, I thought that people will vote Lee Jaemyeong instead of Yoon Seok-youl. 
>> So, I thought that people will vote Lee Jaem-yeong instead of Yoon Seok-youl. 

However, the result was contrary. 
>> CORRECT

This is why I was surprised When I knew that Yoon Seok-youl became the new president. /
>> This is why I was surprised when I found out that Yoon Seok-Youl became the new president. 

In fact, I don't know what can he do for my country. 
>> CORRECT

Just, I hope that he does his best for Koreans. Please....
>>  I just hope that he will do his best for the Koreans in our country. 
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