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What is your all-time favorite movie and what can you learn from it?

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My all-time favorite favorite movie is Iron man because in the movie, Iron man or Tony Stark does his best to protect the Earth for himself. For he do it, he faces the problems like existence of aliens, palladium addiction and death of the apple of his eye. However, to solve the problems, he sacrifice his life. He has heavy responsibility, but he does his best to protect the Earth. From this movie, I can learn that taking back is important, but guarding is also important.

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Hi Kimberly!
 
I like how you used the expression "Apple of his eye". Good job on that. I love that movie too. Iron Man is my favorite Marvel hero. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

My all-time favorite favorite movie is Iron man because in the movie, Iron man or Tony Stark does his best to protect the Earth for himself. 
>> My all-time favorite favorite movie is Iron man because Iron man or Tony Stark does his best to protect Earth.

For he do it, he faces the problems like existence of aliens, palladium addiction and death of the apple of his eye. 
>> He faced a lot of problems like the existence of aliens palladium addiction and death of the apple of his eye. 

However, to solve the problems, he sacrifice his life. 
>> However, to solve the problems, he sacrificed his life. 

He has heavy responsibility, but he does his best to protect the Earth.
>> He has heavy responsibility, but he did his best to protect Earth. 

From this movie, I can learn that taking back is important, but guarding is also important.
>> In this movie, I can learn that looking back is important, so as guarding. 
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