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If you were a very rich person, where would you go for your next holiday?

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If you were a very rich person, where would you go for your next holiday?

I will have a luxury trip.
I am looking for open space where I can rent a private home.
I am travelling domestically. Because I want to drive where I can go and how to easy it.
While staying in a private house, I enjoy a private yacht.

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Hi Monica! 

That's money well spent! Great choice.  

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!


I will have a luxury trip.
>> CORRECT

I am looking for open space where I can rent a private home.
>> I am looking for an open space where I can rent a private home.

I am travelling domestically. Because I want to drive where I can go and how to easy it.
>> I am travelling domestically because I want to drive where I want to go easily. 

While staying in a private house, I enjoy a private yacht.
>> While staying in a private house, I also want enjoy a private yacht.

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