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Re:Turn - Ash Wednesday Sermon 1

작성자: 류*선
2022-03-02 291

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Ash Wednesday marks the beginning of Lent. We are here in the sanctuary to have Ash Wednesday worship service at the moment. And today is the beginning of Lent. The word ‘Lent’ is derived from the Latin word meaning “fortieth.” The Lenten season is the season of forty days. Why Lent is forty days? Jesus spent 40 days in the wilderness prior to beginning his ministry. He was in prayer and fasting for 40 days and nights. We, Christians, also spend 40 days preparing for Jesus' resurrection. Lent is a season of reflection and preparation before the celebrations of Easter. By observing the 40 days of Lent, we, Christians, participate in Jesus Christ’s sacrifice. At the end of Lent, we will go through the passion and death of Jesus Christ. For forty days, our reflection and observation of our journey to Easter is Jesus’ passion and death. We may all agree that we don’t want to talk about pain, suffering, or death in our daily lives. We just want to talk about fun bright spots or happiness.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Han! Thank you for this opportunity that I would be reminded of Jesus' sacrifice and love for us!-Faith-
Ash Wednesday marks the beginning of Lent. 
>> CORRECT
We are here in the sanctuary to have Ash Wednesday worship service at the moment. 
>> We are here in the sanctuary to have the Ash Wednesday Worship Service at the moment. 
OR In this sanctuary, the Lord will be in our midst as we proceed to the Ash Wednesday Worship Service. 
And today is the beginning of Lent. 
>> CORRECT
OR As I've mentioned, today is the official beginning of Lent.
The word ‘Lent’ is derived from the Latin word meaning “fortieth.” 
>> CORRECT
The Lenten season is the season of forty days. 
>> CORRECT
OR Lent is the period of forty days. 
Why Lent is forty days? 
>> CORRECT
OR Why is Lent 40 days long?
Jesus spent 40 days in the wilderness prior to beginning his ministry. 
>> Jesus spent 40 days in the wilderness prior to the beginning of his ministry. 
OR Looking back to the journey of Jesus in the wilderness, He was led by the Spirit there for forty days prior to the beginning of His ministry. 
He was in prayer and fasting for 40 days and nights. 
>> CORRECT
We, Christians, also spend 40 days preparing for Jesus' resurrection. 
>> We, Christians, also spend 40 days preparing for Jesus' resurrection. 
OR Therefore, we, as Christians, need 40 days as we make ready for Christ's resurrection.
Lent is a season of reflection and preparation before the celebrations of Easter. 
>> Lent is a season of reflection and preparation before the celebration of Easter. 
OR Lent represents 'season of reflection and preparation' for us before the celebration of Easter. 
By observing the 40 days of Lent, we, Christians, participate in Jesus Christ’s sacrifice. 
>> CORRECT
At the end of Lent, we will go through the passion and death of Jesus Christ. 
>> CORRECT
OR At the conclusion of the season of Lent, we will go through the passion and death of Jesus Christ. 
For forty days, our reflection and observation of our journey to Easter is Jesus’ passion and death. 
>> CORRECT
OR Our forty day journey will be more of meditation and observation about Jesus’ passion and death. 
We may all agree that we don’t want to talk about pain, suffering, or death in our daily lives. 
>> CORRECT
OR I know we would all rather put aside stories about pain, suffering, or death in our daily lives. 
We just want to talk about fun bright spots or happiness.
>> CORRECT
OR It's because we only desire to talk about real joy and the bright side of life.
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