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How could public transport in your city be improved?

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For my place which was Seoul, it has complicated subway lines, so I can go anywhere I want. However, It is efficient only in not rush hour. Rush hour period makes people crazy. It's just like gummy... I suggest that all people who need to commute by subway must be work at home. It could make subway condition make fresher. It is also because of Covid -19.
However, thanks to subway, we can visit everywhere in Seoul. Also, taking a subway is free for the elder. It gets society to have lots of welfare.
Public transport like taking bus or subway can make the earth healther.

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Wonderful Yun Su!
Thank you for doing your homework and for sharing your thoughts about this topic. 
-T. Caitlyn
For my place which was Seoul, it has complicated subway lines, 
>>I live in Seoul and I can say, it has a complicated but convenient subway lines.
so I can go anywhere I want. 
>>CORRECT
However, It is efficient only in not rush hour. 
>>However, It is not very efficient during rush-hour.
Rush hour period makes people crazy. 
>>Rush-hour makes people crazy.
It's just like gummy... 
>>It's very crowded.
I suggest that all people who need to commute by subway must be work at home. 
>>I suggest that people who commute by subway should just work from home.
It could make subway condition make fresher. 
>>It could make the subway condition fresher. 
It is also because of Covid -19.
>>CORRECT
However, thanks to subway, we can visit everywhere in Seoul. 
>>Still, thanks to subways, we can visit different places in Seoul.
Also, taking a subway is free for the elder. 
>>Also, subways are free for the elderly.
It gets society to have lots of welfare.
>>It is for the welfare of the society.
Public transport like taking bus or subway can make the earth healther.
>>Public transport like taking bus or subway can protect the earth.
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