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I think it\'s acutally not sad story :)

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Hi, Andrea!

I have never went outside the house for two days! I have been doing experimenting about the reciepe. the refregirator was full of ingredients before my rest days start. But now it's almost getting emty. I talked to my friend as well that I just stayed at home, he said you're okay? Ha.. I don't want to tell him the truth. Because he will not understand me. He also loves to stay outside the house like my sister.

Anyway the sad story I said earlier is that she who now I call mother is not my real mother.
My parents got divorced when we were so young. We don't know the reason but we don't try to know and wonder the reason and my father dosen't tell us the reason either. I said it's gonna be a sad story. But It's too long ago I don't even remember and feel any emotion like sad and empty. So the meaning of family to me is a little different from others.
Sometimes It doesn't matter wheter they are tied by blood or not. If they truly love each other they can be a family.

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Hi Q!^^ 

I really appreciate you telling personal stories. 
Your passion, hard-work, perseverance and dedication are inspiring. 
I believe that a family is not always blood related. 

I was imagining how does your kitchen looks right now. 
I can smell the food that you're cooking!^^

Teacher Andrea 


I have never went outside the house for two days! 
>> I didn't get out of teh house for two days! 

I have been doing experimenting about the reciepe. the refregirator was full of ingredients before my rest days start. 
>> I have been experimenting on a recipe, the refrigerator was full of ingredients before my rest day started. 

But now it's almost getting emty. 
>> But now, it looks empty. 

I talked to my friend as well that I just stayed at home, he said you're okay? 
>> I also told my friends that I just stayed home and they asked me if I am okay. 

Ha.. I don't want to tell him the truth. Because he will not understand me. 
>> Ha, I don't want to tell them the truth because he will not understand me. 

He also loves to stay outside the house like my sister.
>>  Correct 

Anyway the sad story I said earlier is that she who now I call mother is not my real mother.
>> Anyways, the sad story that I was saying earlier is about the person whom I call mother is not my biological mother. 

My parents got divorced when we were so young. 
>> Correct 

We don't know the reason but we don't try to know and wonder the reason and my father dosen't tell us the reason either. 
>> We don't know the reason of my parent's' divorce but we never dared to ask. Our father never told us the reason either. 

I said it's gonna be a sad story. But It's too long ago I don't even remember and feel any emotion like sad and empty. 
>> I said it was going to be a sad story but it had happened a long time ago and I don't even remember the emotions, feeling empty and sad. 

So the meaning of family to me is a little different from others.
>> So teh meaning of family to me is a little different from the others. 

Sometimes It doesn't matter wheter they are tied by blood or not. 
>> Sometimes, it doesn't matter whether they are tied by blood or not. 

If they truly love each other they can be a family. 
>> Correct 
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