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If you have time, please try to answer this question. Observe proper punctuation and capitalization. If you have a chance, do you want to change your field of specialization?


Finally, I don¡¯t want to change my field. because I am really satisfied with my field .
That is related to the vocational rehabilitation of the disabled. I work with lots of disabled and non-disabled people together, they each work what they can.
I think anywhere, It is relatively difficult for the disabled to find a job. so the state provides work opportunities for people with disabilities. The company I run is the company for them.

And yet, what if I change my field, think again, now I don¡¯t know what is a good field to me
Anyway, I have to think and prepare some things for life after retirement. I will try to think about it as time permits.

I¡¯m sorry teater! I think my post is a bit long.
you said to me ¡° keep it up¡± ¡°keep up the hard work¡±, so if possible, I¡¯ll keep going!

thank you.

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Elliot!

Wow, your work is really helpful for humanity. I think it is a very challenging field. It makes you seem like a very respectable man with a big heart. 
Don't worry, it isn't that long, so please do not apologize . I am always glad to read your answers.
For today's corrections, I think only Punctuations (periods . and commas ,) should be used properly, as well as capitalization. Please capitalize (big letters) the first letters of the sentences. Also, please do not be afraid to use pronouns. For example  for the 4th correction, instead of repeating "people with disabilities", you can use "them" instead.

Be proud of your work!
-Teacher Violet

Finally, I don¡¯t want to change my field. because I am really satisfied with my field .
>> Finally, I don¡¯t want to change my field because I am really satisfied with it.

That is related to the vocational rehabilitation of the disabled. 
>> CORRECT! 

I work with lots of disabled and non-disabled people together, they each work what they can.
OR >> I work with lots of disabled and non-disabled people together, they each do what they can.

I think anywhere, It is relatively difficult for the disabled to find a job. so the state provides work opportunities for people with disabilities. 
>>I think anywhere, it is relatively difficult for the disabled to find a job, so the state provides work opportunities for them.

The company I run is the company for them.
>> CORRECT! 

And yet, what if I change my field, think again, now I don¡¯t know what is a good field to me
>>And yet, I think again, what if I change my field? Now I don¡¯t know what is a good field for me.

Anyway, I have to think and prepare some things for life after retirement. 
>> CORRECT! 

I will try to think about it as time permits.
>> CORRECT! 

I¡¯m sorry teater! I think my post is a bit long.
>>I¡¯m sorry teacher! I think my post is a bit long.

you said to me ¡° keep it up¡± ¡°keep up the hard work¡±, so if possible, I¡¯ll keep going!
>> You told me to ¡°keep it up¡± ¡°keep up the hard work¡±, so if possible, I¡¯ll keep going!

thank you.
>>Thank you.
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