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What do you like most about family gatherings?

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The first thing which I like most is eating lots of delicious foods during family gathering period. In Korea, most of families usually gather in New year's day. On that day, we can make various korean traditonal foods to have a good time. Especially, we eat rice cake soup, an it makes me gain more weight, but I'm happy like a pig.
The second thing is playing traditional games with relatives. We usually start a game with money, and it is very thrilling.
Last thing which I like is showing my dancing. I'm reallly good at dancing. Furthermore, my relative peers also like dancing. So, we turn off the light and dance insanely in the room.

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Hi, Yun Su!
I had fun reading your homework and I also learned a lot from it. Thank you for sharing with me how fun and interesting your family gatherings are.
-T.Caitlyn
The first thing which I like most is eating lots of delicious foods during family gathering period. 
>>The first thing I like the most about family gatherings would be eating lots of food.
In Korea, most of families usually gather in New year's day. 
>>In Korea, most families usually gather in New Year's Day. 
On that day, we can make various korean traditonal foods to have a good time.
>>On that day, we usually make various Traditional Korean foods and have a good time.
Especially, we eat rice cake soup, an it makes me gain more weight, but I'm happy like a pig.
>>We especially eat rice cake soup, which makes me gain more weight, but I'm happy like a pig.
The second thing is playing traditional games with relatives. 
>>CORRECT
We usually start a game with money, 
>>We usually start the game by betting some money. 
and it is very thrilling.
>>It's very thrilling.
Last thing which I like is showing my dancing. 
>>The last thing that I like is showing my dancing skills. 
I'm reallly good at dancing.
>>I'm really good at dancing.
Furthermore, my relative peers also like dancing. 
>>Furthermore, my relatives, that are also my peers. likes dancing, too. 
So, we turn off the light and dance insanely in the room.
>>So, we would turn off the lights and dance insanely in the room.
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